Update what-info-can-your-company-see-when-you-enroll-your-device-in-intune.md

Final cleanup

Author: lenewsad

memdocs/intune/user-help/what-info-can-your-company-see-when-you-enroll-your-device-in-intune.md

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 # required metadata
 
 title: What info can your company see when you enroll your device?
-description: Explains what IT can and can't see on your managed device.
+description: Describes the information on your enrolled device that's visible to your organization.  
 keywords:
 author: lenewsad
 ms.author: lanewsad
 manager: dougeby
-ms.date: 05/10/2022
+ms.date: 05/31/2022
 ms.topic: end-user-help
 ms.prod:
 ms.service: microsoft-intune
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 # What information can my organization see when I enroll my device?
 
-Your organization cannot see your personal information when you enroll a device in Microsoft Intune. Enrolling your device does make certain information, such as device model and serial number, visible to your support person. Other information is only accessible to your support person in certain situations to help with resolving a device or app issue.   
+Your organization can't see your personal information when you enroll a device in Microsoft Intune. Enrolling your device makes certain information, such as device model and serial number, visible to IT administrators and support people with administrator access. This article describes everything your organization can and can't access on an enrolled device, and explains why certain data is made visible. 
 
-This article describes everything a support person can and can't access on an enrolled device, and provides explanations for why certain data *might* be visible.   
+We use the following terms in this article: 
+
+* Support person: This is the person or department at your organization that you're supposed to contact if you're having problems with your device. They provide technical support for device setup, enrollment, and access.  
+* IT administrator: *IT admin* for short, this person or team of people configure the Microsoft Intune device management and enrollment settings for your organization. Some IT admins also provide technical support.    
 
 ## Things your organization can never see
 
@@ -72,45 +75,44 @@ Your organization can always see:
  
 ### What is a managed app? 
 An app is considered a **managed app** when it's installed in one of the following ways:  
- * You install it from the Company Portal app after it's made available by your support person, an Intune admin.
+ * You install it from the Company Portal app after your organization makes it available to you. 
  * Your organization requires you to have a certain app for work and school and automatically installs it on the device upon enrollment.  
 
 ## Things your organization might see  
 
-Your support person may seek out more information about your enrolled device to help you with registration, enrollment, or troubleshooting. This section describes the type of information that's sometimes available to them.       
+Your organization can see and access certain aspects of your device when assisting with or troubleshooting device setup. This section describes the type of information  available.       
 
 ### Phone number  
-If you're using a corporate-owned device (excluding corporate-owned devices with a work profile), your full phone number is visible to your organization. If you're using a personal device, the last four digits of your phone number are visible. 
+If you're using a corporate-owned device (excluding corporate-owned devices with a work profile), your organization can see your full phone number. If you're using a personal device, they can see the last four digits of your phone number.  
 
  > [!TIP]
  > You can view the ownership type for your device on the Intune Company Portal > **Device Details** page.  
 
 ### Device storage space   
-If you can't install an app that's required for work or school, your organization may view your storage size to figure out if space is low.   
+If you have trouble installing a required app, your support person may look at your storage size to find out if low space is the cause.   
 
-### Location
-Your organization can access the location of a device to the following extent:  
+### Location 
 
-* Corporate-owned device: Your organization can view the location of your lost device. 
-* Personal device: Your organization can't view the location of your device, ever.   
+* Corporate-owned device: Your organization can view the location of a lost device. 
+* Personal device: Your organization can't view the location of a personal device.   
 
-A support person can put a corporate-owned iPhone or iPad into *managed last mode*, which lets them request the location of a missing device. When a support person requests access to your device's location, the device locks and a message appears on the lock screen to explain what's happening. For more information about *supervision*, which is a type of configuration for corporate-owned Apple devices, see [Get started with a supervised iPhone, iPad, or iPod touch](https://go.microsoft.com/fwlink/?linkid=853816) in the Apple support docs. 
+Your organization can put a missing, corporate-owned iPhone or iPad into *managed lost mode*, which lets them request the location of the device. When someone requests access to the device location, the device locks and a message appears on the lock screen to explain what's happening. For more information about *supervision*, which is a type of configuration for corporate-owned Apple devices, see [Get started with a supervised iPhone, iPad, or iPod touch](https://go.microsoft.com/fwlink/?linkid=853816) in the Apple support docs. 
 
 ### App inventory details
 
-You might be required to install a mobile threat defense (MTD) app as part of your organization's security requirements. If your organization requires you to install an MTD app on your: 
+You organization can require you to install a mobile threat defense (MTD) app. If you're required to install an MTD app on your device:   
 
-* Corporate-owned device: Your support person can view details about all apps on the device. 
-* Personal-owned device: Your support person can only view the details of your managed apps.  
+* Corporate-owned device: Your organization can view details about all apps on the device. 
+* Personal-owned device: Your organization can only view the details of your managed apps.  
 
 For more information about mobile threat defense, see [Install mobile threat defense app](set-up-mobile-threat-defense.md).  
 
 ### App permissions  
-*Applies to Android 11 and earlier* 
+*Applies to devices running Android 11 and earlier* 
 
-An IT administrator can automatically grant permission to apps in the work profile. The IT admin does this to reduce the number of prompts you receive. The permissions could be for things like the camera, microphone, and location. If your device is running Android 11, you'll receive a push notification when your IT administrator grants permissions to an app.    
+An IT admin can grant permission to apps in the work profile, both manually and by automation. The IT admin does this to reduce the number of prompts you receive. The permissions could be for things like the camera, microphone, and location. If your device is running Android 11, you'll receive a push notification when someone grants permission to an app.    
 
 ###  Network information
-Some information about network connections for Android devices may be available to your organization support. For example, if your organization requires devices to remain within a certain building, your device would identify the network where it is connected.  
+Some information about network connections for Android devices may be available to your organization. For example, if your organization requires devices to remain within a certain building, your device would identify the network where it is connected.