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articles/key-vault/includes/azure-subscription-prerequisite.md

@@ -7,4 +7,4 @@ ms.date: 03/24/2026
 # Include: Azure subscription prerequisite sentence
 ---
 
-An Azure subscription is required. If you don't have one, create a [free account](https://azure.microsoft.com/pricing/purchase-options/azure-account?cid=msft_learn) before you begin.
+You need an Azure subscription. If you don't have one, create a [free account](https://azure.microsoft.com/pricing/purchase-options/azure-account?cid=msft_learn).

articles/key-vault/managed-hsm/logging.md

@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ Sign in to your Azure subscription by using the Azure CLI [az login](/cli/azure/
 az login
 ```
 
-For more information on authentication options through the CLI, see [sign in with Azure CLI](/cli/azure/authenticate-azure-cli).
+For more information about authentication options through the CLI, see [sign in with Azure CLI](/cli/azure/authenticate-azure-cli).
 
 # [Azure PowerShell](#tab/azurepowershell)
 
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ Sign in to your Azure subscription by using the [Connect-AzAccount](/powershell/
 Connect-AzAccount
 ```
 
-For more information on authentication options through PowerShell, see [sign in with Azure PowerShell](/powershell/azure/authenticate-azureps).
+For more information about authentication options through PowerShell, see [sign in with Azure PowerShell](/powershell/azure/authenticate-azureps).
 
 # [Portal](#tab/azure-portal)
 

articles/key-vault/managed-hsm/private-link.md

@@ -162,8 +162,8 @@ Aliases:  ContosoMHSM.managed.azure.net
 
 ## Troubleshooting guide
 
-* Check to make sure the private endpoint is in the approved state.
-    1. Use `az keyvault private-endpoint-connections show` subcommand to see the status of a private endpoint connection.
+* Check that the private endpoint is in the approved state.
+    1. Use the `az keyvault private-endpoint-connections show` subcommand to see the status of a private endpoint connection.
     2. Make sure connection state is Approved and provisioning state is Succeeded.
     3. Make sure the virtual network matches the one you are using.
 

articles/key-vault/managed-hsm/quick-create-cli.md

@@ -82,7 +82,7 @@ Your Azure account is now authorized to perform any operations on this Managed H
 
 ### Activate your Managed HSM
 
-All data plane commands are disabled until the HSM is activated. For example, you are not able to create keys or assign roles. Only the designated administrators that were assigned during the create command can activate the HSM. To activate the HSM, you must download the [Security Domain](security-domain.md).
+All data plane commands are disabled until you activate the HSM. For example, you can't create keys or assign roles. Only the designated administrators that you assign during the create command can activate the HSM. To activate the HSM, you must download the [Security Domain](security-domain.md).
 
 [!INCLUDE [Security domain prerequisites](../includes/managed-hsm/security-domain-prerequisites.md)]
 

articles/key-vault/managed-hsm/role-management.md

@@ -29,8 +29,8 @@ For a list of all Managed HSM built-in roles and the operations they permit, see
 
 You also need:
 
-* Azure CLI version 2.25.0 or later. Run `az --version` to find the version. If you need to install or upgrade, see [Install the Azure CLI]( /cli/azure/install-azure-cli).
-* A managed HSM in your subscription. See [Quickstart: Provision and activate a managed HSM using Azure CLI](quick-create-cli.md) to provision and activate a managed HSM.
+* Azure CLI version 2.25.0 or later. Run `az --version` to find the version. To install or upgrade, see [Install the Azure CLI]( /cli/azure/install-azure-cli).
+* A managed HSM in your subscription. To provision and activate a managed HSM, see [Quickstart: Provision and activate a managed HSM using Azure CLI](quick-create-cli.md).
 
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